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I paint my fingerprints red,
for courage; panics coalesce,
and regret stains my handshake.
...I'm not sure how I feel about this title. (What else is new, right?)


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wdnest Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013  Professional Writer
Wonderful works. I read a few of your works, it is stunning. Keep it up. 
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :blush: That means a lot to me.
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fernknits Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
i love the poem!  I'm not sure about the title either...
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! And yeah. I'm back and forth about this title every twenty minutes or so lol, so for now I'm just going to leave it alone. I hope in a week or so I'll have it settled in my mind one way or another.
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fernknits Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'll be interested to see what you decide on!
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
(Me too. :P)
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love the title. :) It makes me think of withdrawing fingers...that seems appropriate. 
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That's kind of what I was thinking too...while I feel like there could be a better title, this one does fit, so I may keep it anyway. I'm glad you liked it. :) I'm always afraid everyone else will hate my titles as much as I do lol.

And thank you so much for the favorite! :heart:
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
XD Ah, don't hate your titles! (But, I admit, I get really, really jealous of people who can come up with beautiful titles. ;-;)
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I know right?! Insanely jealous.
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Why can't I be wildly talented with titles? -Sobs in corner-
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Raekia Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013
Great piece. I love that in just 3 lines you've evoked strong feelings and images.
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. I'm glad that it evoked those things for you; it always hard for me to tell if other people will be able to pick up on the emotions I felt while writing something personal like this.

And thank you so very much for the favorite. :heart:
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Raekia Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013
You are so welcome! I struggle with much the same, I finally posted my first piece of writing on here after hoarding it all and I still wonder if it's okay. 
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*it's
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

First off, this piece is wonderful, Vicky. :)

Secondly, the title isn't bad. I dig it. :nod:

 

However, I did think of something for this piece and a potential title could be, "Tremor."

"Panics coalesce," and the final line really made me think of that word. :nod: So perhaps "Tremor," could be an option. :shrug:

 

 

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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hmm...I'm not sure I think "Tremor" is a good idea, only because this is pretty personal and it doesn't fit...the situation I'm writing about. That being said, without any context, I like that as a title. If that makes sense. I think I'm just going to think on it some more. I may leave it. I just don't know.

That you, sir, for the feedback. :heart: I really appreciate it.
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

Aah, I see. And it does make sense. :nod:

 

:heart: My pleasure as always, Vicky. :hug:

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