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Caramel kisses drizzle
from your lips, and I
still to a pulsebeat.
A haiku.

I know that pulsebeat is actually supposed to be two words, but I needed it to be just one word, so I did it anyway.

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hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2014  Professional Writer
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:heart:
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, the imagery here is astounding. :heart:
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :aww:
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure. :)
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the-beastie Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is tasty! A lovely sensuous haiku with a modern feel. I like it :)
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Why thank you!
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ieatrosepetals Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hello!
Your lovely && stunning haiku has been featured here -> kuriakyuuketsuki.deviantart.co…
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!!
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ieatrosepetals Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!
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betwixtthepages Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hello!  This wonderful deviation has been featured in my journal here:


If you could show your fellow deviants some support by :+fav:ing the article and looking at the other featured works, that would be great!

Keep creating!
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh wow...thank you! I'm honored. I always love looking through that feature you do. :)
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betwixtthepages Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!
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vespera Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oooooooooooooooooooooooh :heart: I love this!
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you thank you!
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overtsexualized Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Caramel kisses drizzle...

That flows so beautifully and creates amazing imagery! 
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! It might be the best line I've ever written.
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exquisiteoath Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Modern poetry is very comfortable with the idea of creating new words, so there's no need to justify it when it works as well as this.
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I always feel so awkward doing it, and sometimes I feel like people will think I did it by mistake. But you're absolutely right. Thank you for that. And for the favorite. Just thank you so much. :)
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exquisiteoath Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student General Artist
If it works in context, that's enough.  Most readers are not looking to edit as much as explore a poem, as such if something feels right; they will accept it.  :D
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :)
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exquisiteoath Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013  Student General Artist
You are very welcome.
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