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Sundown, the color
of blood and filth,
offers no disappointment.

haunts the corners
of your pupils;

tatter the centers
of your eardrums;

gutter savagely
under your skin.

Sunrise, the color
of blood and dreams,
offers no respite.
I was trying to write something completely different, and this poem got completely in the way. Does that ever happen to you?
Curl wrists to herbs,
elbows to grains,
shoulders to oil.

Wrinkle toes to pan handles,
knees to blender cups,
hips to measuring spoons.

Pivot nose to platter,
chin to place settings,
collarbone to silverware.
Dinner Preparations
I was toying with the phrase "throw yourself into your work"...this was the result. I feel like this is a little out there, but I was hoping for some feedback.

Does the point come across? Or do I need to add something at the end to make that intention clear? Do you like the imagery? What do you think of it overall?

It's almost May, people! Where int he world does the time due in a month and a half. I might be freaking out about that just a little bit. But freaking out in a good way. :heart:

Okay, ramble over. Please do tell me your thoughts on this!
from tree to femur.
from wave to throat.
from cliff to iris.
from rust to skin.

slivers to paper mache,
creases to flame,
ashes to steel.
More experimentation! Who needs sleep when something hits you after a week of writer's block anyway? :P

Please let me know what you think! I've been toying with some of the imagery in this on and off for months, and this is what's come of it.

What do you think of the formatting?
What do you think of the alliteration in only the one line; does it make sense, or does it seem out of place? (It was done on purpose, but I just want to know if that comes across after reading.)
What are your thoughts about the title?
Overall, what do you think?
Critique? Suggestion? Feedback is awesome!

Love you all. :heart:


Edit 8/28/14: Changed the word "partitions" to "slivers." Thank you for the wonderful advice, TristanCody and Fourthebetter! :heart:

Edit 4/22/15: Featured by :icondailylitrecognition:! :heart:
whatever we ask of you
you do the opposite
and i have to wonder
how you learned that


sculpt my veins blue
to match the shades of june
scenting my pockets

sculpt my scalloped lungs small
with the bubbled edges
of ungraceful acrobat wings

sculpt my surfacescalloped mind empty
in reflection of the slate
filing together in alphabet strands


i do not know you yet
but i know you have my ears
and his stubborn posture
Growing a human is a very unique experience.

Please tell me what you think and give me all of your critical feedback! You are all wonderful. :heart: (And please tell me what you think of the title? I hate titles.)
Earth opens
and shuts
with the sun,

but your eyes
are always closed.
What? She's posting something? :XD:

I kind of liked this, although I have yet to come up with a title for it. Suggestions?

I can't ask for a critique, but please do let me know your critical thoughts! :) Suggestions always welcome.


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T Minus 3 Months(ish) to Baby!

Mon Mar 16, 2015, 9:28 AM

Life's been a bit crazy the past couple of weeks again, so I know I did that thing where I dropped off the face of the earth again. My sister-in-law threw a lovely baby shower for me, but my house was the best place to host it, so getting my house clean enough for 20+ people to be at it was...a bit of a project. Plus the whole 6 months pregnant thing made any progress I made a bit slow lol. I get tired a lot faster than I'm used to when I try to do anything. :grump: But it was fun! And we got lots of awesome stuff! And really only a few duplicates, so that's awesome.

I think things will settle down a bit for me for the next week or two, so I plan on another dA binge in which I try to get caught up on what ya'll have been up to. I know I said I was going to wipe my inbox clean, but I just can't do it. So I've been slowly but surely trying to get caught up (except for that 2 week break I took, of course).

For now, though, Vicky out.

How have you all been? :heart:

dragon: Elevit-Stock, mountains: fantom89, wastelands: resurgere | wroth, chains: ocd1c-stock, scroll: | ba1969, brushes: redheadstock & MouritsaDA-Stock; coding and graphics by kuschelirmel-stock
  • Mood: Happy
  • Reading: The Grapes of Wrath
  • Eating: Pasta
  • Drinking: Milk

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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2015
Thanks for the fave :}
haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
I just wanted to thank you for all the sweet comments. I wasn't able to respond to them all but know that they warmed my heart :love: Thanks again.
haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure! I was happy to get caught up on what you've been up to. :)
BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the favorite! c: 
haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for writing such lovely words!
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hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2015  Professional Writer
Thanks for the :+fav: on "Throwback Thursday," Vicky. :huggle:
haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2015
Thank you for the fave :love:
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